Tuesday, November 15, 2011

Hhhhhhhhhhhhheeeeeeeeelllllllp…

First of all, replace "stood" with "standing". You should remove the comma after "by my side" Instead of saying "It is my mother" say "It's my mother" add an s to the ens of "provide" after "I will be nothing", place a ";" replace the s in apologise with a z. Other than that, good job.

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